I am from a family,
That dislikes my music making me feel like a flower left-for-dead on a window cell.
I am from a household,
Where no other member is welcome.
I am from a place with a long list of rules,
Where rebellion is punishable like I'm some sort of criminal.
I am from inside four walls,
That echo with the screams of my parents.
I am doomed to a lifetime,
Of breakfast for dinner.
Doomed with a "try-too-hard" fatherly figure,
Skipping over my dreams like rocks skipping over the water in a place from my childhood.
But on the other side...
That dislikes my music making me feel like a flower left-for-dead on a window cell.
I am from a household,
Where no other member is welcome.
I am from a place with a long list of rules,
Where rebellion is punishable like I'm some sort of criminal.
I am from inside four walls,
That echo with the screams of my parents.
I am doomed to a lifetime,
Of breakfast for dinner.
Doomed with a "try-too-hard" fatherly figure,
Skipping over my dreams like rocks skipping over the water in a place from my childhood.
But on the other side...
I am from a family,
That loves equally.
I am from a household,
Where we all get along for the most part.
I am from a place with a long list of rules,
All meant to be broken together.
I am from inside four walls,
That echo with the laughter of people.
And I am rewarded with a lifetime spent with caring people.
Rewarded with a "try-to-hard" fatherly figure,
On the other side.
That loves equally.
I am from a household,
Where we all get along for the most part.
I am from a place with a long list of rules,
All meant to be broken together.
I am from inside four walls,
That echo with the laughter of people.
And I am rewarded with a lifetime spent with caring people.
Rewarded with a "try-to-hard" fatherly figure,
On the other side.
I love how you put "with a long list that is meant to be broken"
ReplyDeleteAlicia, I like how you reference your fatherly figure in two ways. One positive and one negative yet both revealing your personal feelings.
ReplyDeleteDeep meaning wow I loved it and nice rhythm
ReplyDeleteRules are meant to be broken
ReplyDeleteI really like how your poem included two different views on the same topic, it made your poem really unique.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your poem and I thought that the other side concept was interesting.
ReplyDeleteI like how your poem changed tones.
ReplyDeleteI like the emotion you put onto your poem it was very good and interesting. Also I liked your emotional transition when you started the second stanza.
ReplyDeleteI like how the last part use like "on the other hand" it showed a lot of feeling.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your poem, it had a lot of meaning. I liked your first two sentences the most.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your poem. My favorite part was skipping over my dreams like rocks skipping over the water In a place from my childhood.
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